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.:I'm Not Kissing You... by SomaShiokaze .:I'm Not Kissing You... by SomaShiokaze
...Goodbye.
Song "Kissing You Goodbye" by The Used
LOVETHATSONG!!!
Hadn't heard it? Here's the link! :D

Redo of - [link]

Critiques are welcome! I draw for fun, but I'm also here to improve! :la:



Disclaimer: I will be putting these in the art I want criticized the most. But any of my other art is welcomed for critiques :D

Wow! I did that drawing over a year ago! XD
My style has changed so much since then! :3

Kinda like how this came out actually ^^ I decided to go with black and white to make it quicker ^^;
Looks like mascara running instead of tears o.o;;; You wouldn't see the tears if they were white so I made them a faded black >.<;;;

BAHdrawingemoshitagainasdfghjk -shot-

Song (c) The Used
Art - both are mine

Now to start on commissions! :dummy:
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:icononii-chan93:
Hello~ I'm UnitedBrothers and I will be doing a critique for you today ^w^

Alright, let's begin. Overall, I really like this piece. It's very emotional and I have had this sort of feeling before.

...eh, moving on, the folds in the clothing is done very well and the tears are excellent. The text is very vibrant and it makes the girl pop out a little more from the dark background. I truly can't find anything that seems off or misplaced.

All and all, this was a really nice piece of work and I enjoyed doing a critique for it! :icongreatjobplz:
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:iconnotensmsk:
This work is good. That is where I will start from. I like the first look that I got from it. The black background with the freyish girl and the different texts have a very unique feel to them. If perhaps not very unique, I would say that I liked this one over the others that share this basic idea.

Moving on wards to the work, like always toy managed to work well with the girl. The creases in her shirt and especially in the cuffs that she is holding onto with her fingers are well made with the lighter shade also playing its part well. This work shows in a way improved shadowing... perhaps that is because it is totally black and white.

Then the expressions and hte crying effect came out well. I personally felt th nose lacking a bit in the last work I saw but here it works and doesn't feel like needing improvements. You also managed to work on small details that are usually ignored, like the raised shoulders as if she is sobbing uncontrollably, comes out well.

Finally, coming to the dialogues, I like them and they have this randomness that compliment the work. If one were to pick up a phrase and read it on its own, it won't make sense (an example would be "I'm nothing" since it doesn't seem to match the theme) but over all they work wonderfully and for some reason the Not kissing you goodbye that is in front has an impact that the others don't (perhaps due to the whitish hue you have surrounded it with being more prominent). I like it that way.

Over all, I like it :D
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leocalderone101 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
nice job
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:iconsomashiokaze:
SomaShiokaze Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thank you ^^
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:iconleocalderone101:
leocalderone101 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
no prob
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:iconemorapunzel:
EmoRapunzel Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Makes me remember when I had to do that... Was basically like that.. <:/

Great job though :heart:
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:iconsomashiokaze:
SomaShiokaze Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Aw...I know what you mean :c

But thank you :aww:
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:iconemorapunzel:
EmoRapunzel Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You are most welcome ^^ :heart:
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:icontaofreak:
taofreak Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student General Artist
this makes me cry
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:icongrimasever:
GrimAsEver Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Writer
It's called Kissing You Goodbye? I thought it was called Men Are All The Same? I looked at the picture and immediately started singing that song. x3
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:iconsomashiokaze:
SomaShiokaze Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Aha yeah XP In "Men Are All The Same" they put "Kissing You Goodbye" lyrics in there c:
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:icongrimasever:
GrimAsEver Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Writer
Yeah, at the end! XD I was sitting there debating on who it was for like four minutes before I figured it out. XD And this is really cute, by the way~
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:iconsomashiokaze:
SomaShiokaze Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Aha XD
Thank you though~ :3
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:icongrimasever:
GrimAsEver Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Writer
Welcome, sweetheart.
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:iconthealleyrat:
TheAlleyRat Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student General Artist
haha looks awesome, I need to hear that song though O.o
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:iconsomashiokaze:
SomaShiokaze Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thank you c:
You should~ It's a great song :3
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:iconthealleyrat:
TheAlleyRat Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student General Artist
np and ooo adorable icon!
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:iconsomashiokaze:
SomaShiokaze Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thank you~ :3 I wish I could make it though >.<
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:iconthealleyrat:
TheAlleyRat Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student General Artist
learn the art of pixels XD
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:iconsomashiokaze:
SomaShiokaze Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I'm trying XD Much more difficult than it looks ^^;
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:iconthealleyrat:
TheAlleyRat Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student General Artist
it is :noes:
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:iconsomashiokaze:
SomaShiokaze Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
You tried I'm guessing? XD
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